Thursday, July 22, 2010

A reply from the chairman

Stan,
I read the email you're thinking of sending. Sounds good, but I have some corrections to it that I'd like you to make.

I think the lengthy parenthetical expression at the beginning of the note is cumbersome. Should occur lower in the body of the letter.

There are also some notable problems with your syntax. Tighten it up a bit. And one glaring error popped out at first reading. You say:

"Nothing worth going on a diet for." You've ended your sentence with a preposition, Stan. No good. Fix it.

Other than that, go ahead and send it out.

Bob Watson
Chairman

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